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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Fri Feb 26, 2010 4:55 am

Judul norak? iya.

Cerita ngaco? iya.

Kenapa ditulis? pingin aja. *PLAK* =)) =))

Mari! langsung hajar saja =)) kritik yang banyak!
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Post by Alfonze Alger on Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:37 am

wah, permulaannya bagus :D

dan diakhiri sama keterangan yg menjelaskan bahwa si ceweknya meninggal...

sudut pandang pertamanya jg udah bagus

tinggal pandai2 ngatur paragrafnya aja :D...soalnya agak pusing juga kalau 1 paragraf misalnya sebanyak itu, IMO

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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:40 am

^ loh itu saya copas semestinya ada 5 paragraf an loh ''a

jangan2 gak jalan ya? =w=

edit =))
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Post by Alfonze Alger on Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:51 am

nah, sekarang udah lebih gampang dibaca

itu gak ada lanjutannya ya...(penasaran)

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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:52 am

^lanjutannya? =))

loh loh? mau dilanjutin gimana?
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Post by Alfonze Alger on Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:53 am

dilanjutin/diperjelas penyebab si ceweknya ngelakuin itu misalnya

buat aja chapter 2-nya, tapi flashback

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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Fri Feb 26, 2010 6:57 am

^JEDOR =)) =))

bisa stuck saya...

masih bagus itu cerita jalan =)) =)) itu aja ngetiknya ngebut supaya ide gak terbang =))

tapi yah... okelah nanti saya pikirin OTL =))
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Post by Alfonze Alger on Fri Feb 26, 2010 7:01 am

ya terserah sih

mau dilanjut gak dilanjut juga itu keputusan mizu

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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Fri Feb 26, 2010 7:05 am

^pingin lanjut =)) =))

tapi kalo stuck gawat...

ah tapi klo stuck juga gak akan ngerubah cerita yang ini =))

okey saya coba lanjut!
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Post by Ulqui Schiffer on Sun Mar 07, 2010 11:00 pm

Ulqui baru tahu ada FF baru *ketinggalan berita*


Weew.... bagus desu~
Ulqui nggak bisa merangkai kata-kata sih *jadinya amburadul ntar* =))

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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Sat Mar 13, 2010 4:10 pm

^lolololol =)) =)) =))

waih XD sankyuu XDD

saya lagi nyoba bikin prequel nya XDD

kalau jadi mungkin judulnya bakal "One night in december" *lolololol*
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