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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 12:19 pm

Ah.. silahka kritik disini.. kalo mo kasih saran juga nga masalah..

Huuf... omake pertama buatan ruu pasti ga bagus kan..?

Mo bilang omakenya jelek juga takpapa... huuf...

Ditunggu ya kritik dan sarannya
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Post by Sayoppe on Thu Sep 17, 2009 12:44 pm

yaap
udah bagus kok xD

memang ada kata kata yang agak ga pas =))
tapi itu wajar karna ini kan omake yang pertama ruu buat xD

jadi LANJUTKAN yaa xD
pasti lebih bagus chapter berikutnya =3

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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 12:46 pm

ah~
arigato sayo~ pasti akan lebih bagus chapter berikutnya~
lalu, Anda yang pertama comment disini~
Selamat~ *sambil tepok tangan*
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Post by Alfonze Alger on Thu Sep 17, 2009 1:13 pm

ah!

ide ceritanya sih bagus, saya suka...ledakan bomnya, sampai ending chapternya yg menurut saya sih keren..xD

saya mau ngomentarin penulisannya aja..

itu, paragrafnya kalau bisa sih di rapihin, biar yang bacanya enak..=D

paragraf sama dialog kalau bisa di pisah

selebihnya sudah bagus

dan, LANJUTKAN!

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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 1:15 pm

Ho.. begitu ya...
okeh lah!
=3
arigato kritik dan saranya buat semuanya =3
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Post by suzurin on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:38 pm

Ri, riya ...?? *bengong*
*nunjuk diri sendiri*
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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:40 pm

e.. eh?
Riya?
Emang riya siapa?
suzu Riya? *nga ngerti*
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Post by suzurin on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:45 pm

na,nama asli suzu .... =="

yaaah meski bukan riya penulisan nya ..

di real suka di panggil ria ... =w="
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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:51 pm

^
oh begitu ya.. ==
Ruu ga ada maksud bawa2 suzu kok di cerita itu...
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Post by suzurin on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:53 pm

hhahahaha
suzu cuma kaget aja kok ! XD

btw , tragis juga ya cerita nya ..
Itu masih bersambung ruu ?
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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:54 pm

iya~
ceritanya ruu buat lumaya tragis~
masih bersambung :D
Cuma 2 Chapter sih... Jadi abis ini kayaknya tamat :D
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Post by suzurin on Thu Sep 17, 2009 3:57 pm

Oh ya ?
bagus bagus ...

LANJUTKAN ! *jari membentuk segitiga biru*
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Post by Fuschia.A.T.Ellenoire on Thu Sep 17, 2009 4:17 pm

*mangap cengo pingsan*

na-nak ruuvkarya ini KEREN! mizu suka cara pembawaannya

wuahhh lanjutkan!
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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 4:39 pm

Uwah arigato semuanya!

Terimakasih sekali atas commentnya~

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Post by Ulqui Schiffer on Thu Sep 17, 2009 4:58 pm

Mwahahhaahah
Tak disangka orang ini bisa bikin omake juga *ditabok*

Hnggg.... Ceritanya sih bagus
Tapi....

Masih soal penulisan juga *ditabok*
Ada kata-kata yang kurang pas~
Terus... Ini sudut pandang orang ketiga kan?
Kok ada sudut pandang orang pertamanya juga ya?
<-- Ato dia salah liad *digebuk* XD

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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 5:03 pm

Awakakakakak XDD
Maklum lah pai XDD
Baru pertama kali bikin XDD
Itu pun bikinnya jem 2 pagi XDDD
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Post by Ulqui Schiffer on Thu Sep 17, 2009 5:11 pm

Buseeeeett....
Jam 2 pagi *Tepar*

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Post by ruu chi on Thu Sep 17, 2009 5:18 pm

Awahahahah XDD
Abis selain jem 2 pagi w sibuk~
Sibuk OL dan CFC... BWAAHAHAHAHA XDD
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